FIRst Draft Crit

"Write with the door closed. Rewrite with the door open." - Stephen King

​We're back after a long summer's writing with revised first drafts. The rewriting process, after receiving several sets of notes, started to gain focus and momentum in the last few weeks before delivery and I ended up reworking many of the major beats and most of the dialogue. I think it's better than the first draft... Probably... But who can say?

The first session of the autumn term was a round table crit, where mentors swapped mentees and read their scripts for the first time, providing extensive feedback in a group setting. Filmmakers read one another's scripts too, so the debate could be opened up to the floor, but with so many scripts to get through it didn't allow for much detail. In the next week or so we'll be forming a more solid game plan for the development of the second draft that's due at the end of November. 

On Wednesday we met the influx of new filmmakers for the Autumn term, who all have action movie character-worthy names like Laila Leghari and Nate Bryon. I paired up with Jon Champion (see?) and we singled out our protagonist's most painful moment. We were then asked to describe it to one another, and then to go away and write the other person's scene with no dialogue. We then read each other's interpretations of our scenes and then rewrote our own scenes without dialogue. Got it? Good.

Rewriting key scenes without using dialogue has been something I have been planning to do, and this exercise only confirmed how useful it is to free yourself from the constraints of conversation to look at how a story can be told visually and though sound. The annoying thing is that rewriting someone else's scene is so much easier and more fun than rewriting your own... But this is a technique I'm going to employ for further scenes as it prompted the development of a much more atmospheric ending to the film.